Sometimes, you could wonder how
What he's doing now, but
I kinda get the feeling, he'll be knockin on my door
And my, hand guns wastin, hanging from my waste
Can't seem to find the, right words to get it straight
Down in the middle of it all
Is a hollow man about six feet tall
Bullet sixty nine
I got no other friend
Maybe it would ease his pain
Maybe he'd stay the same
That bullet told me so
Guess I, should get and go
Stay out, late, its dark
Hold on to what I got, now
I kinda have the hunch, he'll be bustin through my door
Oh my, gun is rusted, I'll be busted too
Can't seem to find the, right words to get it through
Down in the middle of it all
Is a hollow man, about six feet tall
Bullet sixty nine
I got no other friend
Maybe it would ease his pain
Maybe he'd stay the same
That bullet told me so
Guess I, should get and go
Down in the middle of it all
Is a hollow man about six feet tall
And he said
Bullet sixty nine
I aint got no other friend
Maybe it would ease my pain
Or should I go home again
If that bullet told you so..
Bullet sixty nine
I got no other friend
Maybe it would ease his pain
Maybe he'd stay the same
That bullet told me so
Guess I, should get and go














Devious Comments
After re-reading it though, with the jazzy tune in mind, it's pretty good
Constructive points: vocabulary D: It can make or break a good poem! But that's okay
Excellent points: Really catchy for a song
Love it <333
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Oh my god. I have fucking Jaffa cakes in my coat pocket! Oh mamma! Oh daddy! Let's all play kabadi!
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- What do you buy at the Movies?
Your mom was on sale with a large sized popcorn and candy.
- Anything big ever happen in your town?
Did I mention your mom is on sale with large sized popcorn and candy at the theater?!? YOU CAN'T BEAT THAT MAN!!
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